“For such a ravishing girl she clearly didn’t understand the first thing about being ravished. She was shockingly unaware of the protocol of such matters.”
Has a first-draft feel. Scarborough has demonstrated she can write better than this. Not sure what “another light-hearted contemporary fantasy adventure” is, but if this is an indication, I’ll steer clear in the future. A Terry Prachett wantabee?
“What are you going to dooo?” [sic] “You’ll see.” “And I though I was the enigmatic one in this outfit.”
Needed a good editing. Lots of telling, sloppy sentences, and non sequiturs.
“Even a loose-tongued person who know that he might wake up as a crow can find his own fate a good deal more absorbing than his neighbors.”