(Spoilers abound. You don’t want to read this anyway.)
“The way I perceived the world was more from my emotional state than the environment itself.”
Interesting concept: Trekkian teleportation through wires (“electroportation”) due to a genetic aberration/manipulation. Entire body including whatever clothes and stuff he’s holding. Execution was deficient. Start with the hero’s name: Alex Fine (note author’s name).
Written for young adult readers it is especially unfit for that audience. The hero is an immoral, antisocial misanthrope who lies, cheats, steals, even kills with abandon. He uses drugs and alcohol simultaneously. He’s not amoral; he knows he’s doing wrong; he just keeps doing it.
The hero becomes a twisted Robin Hood, stealing from gangsters and banks to fund charities. He or his friends spout various sermons on various politically correct topics, even as he pillages and plunders–even admitting that innocent lives are ruined by his actions.
The writing is stilted. Apparently, English is not the author’s primary language. Dialogue: “I am from Los Angeles.” I am also from Los Angeles.” Really? Sounds like robots, not LA teens. Or, “Henry, listen to me, I’m your brother.” “…, Henry.” “Listen, George …” Or “trying to protect my credo.”?
Technical issues: Doesn’t the author realize that most businesses and government agencies back up their files in physically off-line storage? Hero’s always hungry, presumably because of the energy used in de-materializing and re-materializing, but he drinks Diet Cokes. The electroportation process involves water and calcium. He drinks lots of water, but he seldom eats calcium-rich foods. You’d think he’d pop Tums like candy.
Quibbles: Clueless. He steals a fancy watch from a gangster in Amsterdam, then wears it in public. Transfers not millions, but billions of dollars and thinks he covers it up by erasing the history. He buys an island from a Russian oligarch/gangster whom he has just bankrupted and retains the entire staff. He knowingly establishes his philanthropic trust with the law firm of the father of the girl he’s wooing and, eventually, betraying.
Nice cover art.
“I didn’t understand that protecting my offspring was my number one parental priority.”
Has great potential–the bones of a great story exist–but it doesn’t deliver.